Guess what? I was on my way to Walmart to pick up some mulch for the flower garden. I was thinking about the first tow lines of the song. Here are the original lines.
You're the girl next door, with a bad boyfriend
I fell for you before you knew him.
I wasn't a fan of bad boyfriend and did it really matter who fell for who first? Probably not.
Here is my revised first verse-
You're the girl next door, a cheating boyfriend
The rumor's I hear, You're leaving him
I sit on my front porch, play my guitar
You tell him goodbye, step outta his car.
I think this works better. Bad was to vague. One persons bad could be another persons good. Cheating is definitely bad. Word on the street is their is trouble in paradise. That gives me a good reason to be sitting on my front porch playing love songs. Also, the line you tell him goodbye. It could be the final goodbye, which helps explain the second verse.
Second verse- You walk up your sidewalk, across my lawn
said," Hey Cowboy, play me a song.
Don't make it sad, don't wanna cry
tell me everything's, gonna be alright.
Oops! I see a problem with the last line. Too long. Not conversational. I like this better.
Tell me it's all, gonna be alright.
I am ready to make a second rough demo. How do I define a rough demo? That is anything that I sing. lol I will make this and sent it to NSAI to get a professional evaluator's opinion. Cross your fingers.